So from getting my abstract back, the feedback that I got from this – was that it was a very bias and almost opinion based abstract. There needs to be more clarity, less waffle. From what I wrote, it showed an unbalanced argument. I need to go back over this and alter it into a more unbiased balanced piece of work.
I need to talk about more about exploring the elements that make up and define the relationships humans have with objects and idealistic ‘goals’. How do these (if at all) affect peoples lives and relationships with other people?
I need to be impartial to the project and not overcrowd it with my own opinion, the conversation needs to remain fair on both sides.